I am writing a book. And the girl is walking through a very bad neighborhood and at night.
How do i describe the surroundings? I already have down how she feels and what she is thinking but as sight and sound i can’t think of anything.
How do you describe walking through a very bad neighborhood at night?
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there are these guys standing outside their house. they are drunk yelling hey baby where you going. there is trash on the sidewalks. used needles ect. young children sitting on the steps. they look like they haven’t had a bath in quite some time. and lots of brushes in the shadows. she can hear footsteps but when she turns around she can not see any one. there is an alley way she looks and can see a prostitute with a customer. hope some of that helped.
There are shadows in odd places, and sometimes unfortunately also some odd-looking people in bright places.
In bad neighborhoods, the people there generally know each other for good or bad, and they know when a stranger arrives, so it’s probable the girl will be noticed, though whether and how she responds to that (and what form the ‘noticing’ takes) all depends on your character.
In bad neighborhoods I’ve either lived or worked or walked through, I generally wore dark clothing and did a thing I called ‘walking through raindrops’ at night.
As for sights and sounds, they are plentiful, and rather ordinary to any neighborhood. Music (often loud, but not necessarily so), food smells, lights and shadows, buildings and those unfortunate empty places where one isn’t sure what exactly is there, if anything. A few animals, mainly cats who run away; the barking of unseen dogs, possibly a rat or two and maybe even (if this girl notices the small things) old, torn spider webs across a doorway; roaches that seem a bit too bold.
Is there a bad neighborhood near you? You don’t have to walk it alone, but possibly you could drive through it during the day with a friend and just notice how you are noticed – what hear and what you see.
Experience is sometimes the best teacher of all.
Still I wrote what I recall of times a while back, just in case.
I am walking trhough an area that police are afraid to visit. Where if you do not belong there, you should not be. But I had to go. The stench was of musky old beer, rottened flesh of dead roddents, and a faint smell, old cheap sex. Even in the daylight you would be scared, but at night you are almost looking for trouble if you stay longer then 10min. I needed 15min. I was half way through when the first sign of trouble crosses my path. I ignore it, and continue. I am where I need to be.
The rest is up to you, because I do not know why you needed to go there.
Good luck, and hope this helps.